My 1st comic on here...What you think?

Suicide Atttempt by justinl504 9-13-03

Two friends just find out about the death of a friend... Then theres only one thing left to do... Holy Sh*t! After much thinking and pain, one decides he cant take it... I cant stand it anymore... What?!?!.... But fails on attempts of suicide... Alright....alright...just one more.... ....

Cut back on narration. If it's not necessary to the comic, don't put it in.

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Batman created by Bob Kane

Yes, yes.. listen to the dcomposed one.