Part One

Sid and Grey Number 3: The Axe Effect. Part 1. by sid_omega 9-21-03

Here we find Grey and Sid discussing the false advertisment of Axe bodyspray. Hey Grey. I just bought some of that Axe deoderent bodyspray. That shit doesn't work. How so? The commercial said I would get molested by random hot chicks in the elevators. That never happened to me. This product sucks. Here, have it. Girls? Elevator? Hell yeah I will take it! The next day...(oh and after that, to be contined...) Hey there big boy...ooo, come closer...ahhh....ooo....I want you now! Hot DAMN I love this. Come to papa baby.

Part Two

Sid and Grey Number 3: The Axe Effect. Part Two by sid_omega 9-21-03

We left off with Grey about to get some serious action. Let's tune in. (*bow wicky wacka WHOHOO*) You bet you can come get some. Oh yeah baby... After she got off the elevator, he went straight to Sid. Dude! That stuff works! You gave it to me, and this hot chick started rubbing my nipples reallllly hard. No fucking way? Dude, give me that shit back. The end...(*bow wicky wacka WHOHOO*) Well hello there sunny. Ooo, you smell niice.... AHHH!!!!!

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Chicks dig The Bear.(*not pictured: Chicks digging The Bear*)

I kinda like your comics. Cut back on the narration, but you have the structure down well and your punchlines are decent.

Your comics are funny keep it up!

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Is it wrong to laugh?

Thanks guys. :)

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Chicks dig The Bear.(*not pictured: Chicks digging The Bear*)

Is it just me, or do people complain about over-narration a lot on here?

Judging from my reference material on Americans (Fictional progs like 'Friends' and the like), they fall asleep after reading books...hmmm.

Anyway, i was more offended by the bastardised (American) sentence construction than the narration - which seems about as equally valid a point. Lost my train of thought again.

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I am a Strange One/'His world is small.'/ 'I love hunting foxes - Ginger Bastards!'/ 'They weren't aiming at us, Not at my house' - Dead Prez/ The Pravda-Raï Party: Triumphing over Diversity

So what you are saying is that I...need to make my sentences better?

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Chicks dig The Bear.(*not pictured: Chicks digging The Bear*)

Less American basically:

Come get some = Come and get some
waiting on a response = waiting for a response

for instance.

And the whole thing of leaving 'dick' off the end of 'sucks dick' - there are just so many things wrong with that practice, i don't know where to start. :)

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I am a Strange One/'His world is small.'/ 'I love hunting foxes - Ginger Bastards!'/ 'They weren't aiming at us, Not at my house' - Dead Prez/ The Pravda-Raï Party: Triumphing over Diversity

Nah man, say what you wanna. I like your shit. Talk in the way you feel most comfortable. The Ekpyro person raises a point but i figure the way you type in you stuff is good neway. Im not going to comment on the term 'less American', it kind of amuses me though because im a brit but im fairly americanised but also anti Monopoly, and america seems to monopolise over other countries a helluva lot. when was the last time you met a unitedkingdomised american? and you dont need to say dick at the end of sucks.. however central heating would be good.. 'Sucks Central Heating'. hmmmm

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Fuck this, tarte or no tarte i am wiggling with the best of them forever

Thanks Monkey. I have noticed this guy analizes things way too damn much (not a bad thing) but the part when you always want a dick behind sucks disturbs me...

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Chicks dig The Bear.(*not pictured: Chicks digging The Bear*)

yeah my dick, some chick doing the sucking:) lol

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Fuck this, tarte or no tarte i am wiggling with the best of them forever

oh and the amount of narration isnt always a bad thing, develop your own style lol *I write my strips for myself like my stories and shit i was writing before i discovered this site last night lol* if you dig your own stuff thats cool. and if other people find it funny too thats a bonus

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Fuck this, tarte or no tarte i am wiggling with the best of them forever

I couldn't resist on this one, agilemonkey, sorry:

Yep, and you've got the whole Stating the Obvious routine 'down pat' *pisses himself*

Anyway, the point i had with regards to 'sucks dick' is that the original expression was 'sucks dick' and it was cut down by one word for Christian-appeasing American television. The fact that yanks use it in that form in real life - where no censorship is necessary - just shows how much they're effected by their media. Sorry, am i 'analizing' things too much again? :D

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I am a Strange One/'His world is small.'/ 'I love hunting foxes - Ginger Bastards!'/ 'They weren't aiming at us, Not at my house' - Dead Prez/ The Pravda-Raï Party: Triumphing over Diversity

You must be, like, British or something...

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Chicks dig The Bear.(*not pictured: Chicks digging The Bear*)

hahaha, well said:) pissed myself laughing:) Aight that sucks dick comment is kind of true and i never looked at it like that. im too tired to go off on a tangent at christianity right now, as im meant to be doing coursework or calling my bird but im doing neither.. oh well illsee my bird tomoz and ive practically failed GCSE's anyway for wasting too much time when i should have been doing coursework.. guh!

And whats everyone think of my new comic about the All British Moo Mar Cow People *Talk about it in the topic i made up if you could*

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Fuck this, tarte or no tarte i am wiggling with the best of them forever