Feedback? (Brad & Amy #1-3)

Brad & Amy #1 by bruno321 2-12-04

You're always on that fucking computer! ... Are you listening to me, asshole? If only women operated like computers... If only men operated like my vibrator...

Brad & Amy #2 by bruno321 2-12-04

Brad and Amy take time out to talk... ... ... A Climactic Milestone in Communication Occurs... So, ...

Brad & Amy #3 by bruno321 2-12-04

Why don't men express themselves more? I need food... All they care about is there video games...I only wish I could be treated as well as those damn contraptions! I'm so hungry...I really need food... What I need is to be held, needed, LOVED...what I need is a real man - someone who will treat me RIGHT DAMMIT! FOOD, BITCH! FOOD!!!

I like them!

:-D

good shit. in #2, the second narration detracts, though. but all good shit. keep up the good work.

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i want to piss on you

Thanks! I'm glad you guys like it! Here's #4...

Brad & Amy #4 by bruno321 2-12-04

Brad thinks about Amy... I need to get laid.

Not really...it reminds me a little of Far Side with the way it was done. I do like it.

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I will rate you hard, and unendingly.

Well, I think I'll continue writing this series...seems like a few out there are enjoying it. #5...

Brad & Amy #5 by bruno321 2-12-04

Hey, I think I screwed up things with Amy. She isn't accepting my calls anymore, so I'm going to her house right now! I don't know what to do. What if she won't see me? I don't think I can handle that kind of rejection right now. You know what it's like - to lose someone you love. I don't know what happened - I have to confront her though. She MUST talk to me. Do I know you?

^_^ good stuff .. I look forward to more.
-Xirath