[Click to view comic: 'Father Blaney's Gay Cruise']

[Click to view comic: 'Father Blaney's Gay Cruise (part duex)']

Almost. Too much dialog. Trim it down to what you need to get the jokes across, and lose the rest.

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peddling the funny around since 09/24/2002

Contrary to popular belief...there are often way more catchers in the rotation than pitchers. I still liked the comics, though.

I think the second one is more successful than the first.

Also, if you plan on posting one or two strips at a time that aren't part of a large series, it is generally best to put them all in one thread. Gives other folks' topics more room to breathe, and also keeps all your strips in one handy location for people who want to see them.

You're good, kid..... real good. You're ready for The Show.

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"We're fighting for this woman's honor, which is probably more than she ever did." Groucho Marx

I would have liked the first one a lot better if the father did not have any dialogue in the third panel.

I thought all of the dialogue was okay.

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Legend, oh legend, the third wheel legend...always in the way.