Seph's was better, although I don't know what "craft service table" means. The structure was there and the punchline had punch, even though I didn't get it. I assume it's an industry term I'm not familiar with. If it's not -- if it's something you made up or if you misspelled "Kraft," then the comic's just not funny dispite the structure. But you've defintely got talent there.
Primo, I saw what you were trying to do, but I don't think it quite works in the sc.com comic format. Keep it up, though.
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