Hi, will youplease look at my only comix? I gotteth twoeth!

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If you wanna eat a pineapple, eat a lemon. CHEEZ!

It's a good start, i would suggest having a little more content and a punchline unless you are doing a series. The second one was funny at teh end with the ME WANT LOLIPOP. But i don't know what you mean by baddies

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I dumb :D

Neither do I!

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If you wanna eat a pineapple, eat a lemon. CHEEZ!

The reaper twins is O.k...decent used of "teh absurd". All your other comics should be used as a example of the dangers of writing while sniffing glue.

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There was once a man who said:"nothing is true!". Although later it was found out that he was lying.

lmao, critique from a 5 star should include helpful things

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I dumb :D

Here's some helpful critique, flipy: nobody here owes you anything. Quit complaining about the quality of the feedback that you get for free.

Shadow, I think you need to put a little more thought and time into your comics. In the first one, "priest" is spelled wrong, and the last panel has no background -- why?

All of the narration in your comics is unnecessary. The comics would be just as intelligible without it, so it's really just a distraction. Likewise, don't feel like you have to use all of the available spaces for dialog/thought bubbles. If there's no reason for a character to be saying something, then leave him silent -- excess dialog is, again, distracting.

Finally, give us something concrete to laugh about, don't just throw a bunch of random things together and call it humor. In "The problem with norms!" -- what's the joke? Is Deuce's fly not really undone? Does he not have a fly? Is Pants referring to the fact that Deuce's open mouth looks like an undone zipper? We never find out. Pants obviously thinks something is funny, but we can't laugh with him because we don't know what's going on.

Good luck with your strips.

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

Yeah, I find it helps if there's a joke in there somewhere ;-)

Here's my advice of one way to go about creating a good strip:

1. Think of a joke, or a funny situation that can be conveyed in this format.

2. Choose your characters and backgrounds carefully. The expressions and poses of the characters should match the dialogue and situation. (One of the problems with the Norms strip is that the dialogue and expressions don't match at all).

3. Think about the dialogue, and write it properly, with punctuation and all that stuff they teach at school. That way we'll be able to understand it better. Also, it helps if the first person to speak in a frame is on the left.

4. Hold back on the narration. It's pretty rare that you need to use that more than once in a strip, if at all.

5. Remember, it's easy to be random, and it may be fun, but rarely funny.

Tony

6) after writing the strip, make sure it makes sense to ANYONE besides yourself. Just because you know the "context" of a joke, doesnt mean that everyone else can.

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There was once a man who said:"nothing is true!". Although later it was found out that he was lying.

Since when does anyone owe me anything, I just see no point to taking the time to comment on something just to say nothing and making it negative.

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I dumb :D

how can you say nothing and make it negative?
That must come from the same branch of expressions as "Negative silence" or "unwelcome feedback".

Strip writting is like anything else in life, if you practise long enough, you'll eventually get good at it.Less talking and more writing!

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There was once a man who said:"nothing is true!". Although later it was found out that he was lying.

Are we up to No.7 on the list yet?

Regardless...

7. Economy of words.
If you can say the same thing is fewer words, do so.