This is my first attempt at making a web comic so be gentle :D

Gamers Domain #1 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

Hey Aryeh, I'm glad you talked me into getting Halo, I'm havin a blast! No problem, we seem to work good as a team. heh...I have an idea....~smiles~ uh oh......what? Lets put all the vehicles in that hallway.....heh ~laughs~ sweet! ...lets do it ~evil grin~

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Hm. I think there was a joke in there, but it seemed to be more like a general strategy for gameplay than a funny comic.

-Try not to write out actions. For ~laugh~ try "ha, ha." or nothing at all. We should, for the most part, be able to figure out the emotions of the characters from the context of the dialog.

-Make the punch line punchier than a strat, which I said before. In any case, I did this:

Modded Halo by LuckyGuess 12-02-06

Hey Aryeh, I'm glad you talked me into getting Halo, I'm havin a blast! No problem, we seem to work good as a team. We should do something that will probably get us fragged multiple times and is totally time consuming and pointless. Correction- 'Seemed' to work good as a team. Let's put all the vehicles in the hallway. We can't play together any more.

Hope that helps. Your enthusiasm makes me like you better.

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the kid's getting old, the kid's getting old

sweet!, thanks for the tips, you actualy made it sound better...heh. Is there a way to edit the comics that ive already done? Thanks again. :-)

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In order to edit, you have to donate. Even 5 dollars is not too small.

I'd like to echo what Lucky said, and put in a word for us gaming Neandertals. I didn't understand your strip, but I understood Lucky's. If you're accessible, then you have the added draw of opening up a world that other people might not get. Toon about gaming all you want (please! there's a wide open market in gamer comics aimed at gamers and not their parents in the newspapers), but let me in on the joke.

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You can take the heart out of the hooker but you can't take the hooker out of the heart. -- Frankenhooker

I didnt realize at first when I wrote it up but its an inside joke of me and my firend. The situation actualy took place when we played Halo together one evening. We started to take all the vehicles on our side and run them into the hallway which was the only short cut to the other sides base.....you should have seen the comments fly after that...lol. Everyone was forced to walk around the loooong way to get to each others base, and since it was capture the flag it made it that much more funny to us. They couldnt even blow the vehicles out of the way...heh. Anyways, thats what I was trying to get across in the first comic and obviously failed miserably, but at first you dont succeed... :-)

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Also, this is an ongoing comic, where the two of us get sucked into the internet and go from game to game that is currently being played on the net, and the only way to jump to the next game is to die off in the current one...heh. Right now I have 13 comic strips for this already.

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rascalsviper75

I hope you don't play Sidewinder with sniper rifles. That stage is lame with sniper rifles. Also:

http://www.stripcreator.com/comics/LuckyGuess/sets/reflexbfme2/

That is a set where me and my BFME2 clan act like retards. Some people who do not play BFME2 like it, but it caters almost entirely to gamers. Read and maybe you'll pick something up (and hopefully not anything bad).

Also also: If you have to explain a comic then it's not worth making into a comic. Make sure we know the story (unless it's a set) just by reading the comic, like what bolo said. I'm sure that quite a few toprateds are good examples.

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LuckyGuess

Good point. I guess I should have stated its a set of ongoing comics first then...heh. This is still all so new but still sooo cool. :-) After the silly season is over I'll be donating, looks like I need to edit a few things, and btw nice comic there.

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rascalsviper75

Good point. I guess I should have stated its a set of ongoing comics first then...heh. This is still all so new but still sooo cool. :-) After the silly season is over I'll be donating, looks like I need to edit a few things, and btw nice comic there.

It's a set of comics. When you donate you'll be able to organize new comics into sets that are apart from the main list. Try scrolling down the list of someone's main comics and then one of their sets.

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sssh! some of us are trying to watch the movie

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Let's kick my ass!

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I was never able to get through that last timed race in Halo.

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I only ever did it on the easiest mode. Otherwise it's ridiculously hard, and outside my realm of gameitude.

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Since I am doing a run on comic, do I post them all here? Thanks.

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rascalsviper75

It's your thread. Do whatever you want with it.

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Ok...heres my first comic ive been doing. Its not like the others ive seen here where its one or two strips but its an ongoing adventure of sorts...heh. I hope everyone likes it......

Gamers Domain #1 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

Hey Aryeh, I'm glad you talked me into getting Halo, I'm havin a blast! No problem, we seem to work good as a team. heh...I have an idea....~smiles~ uh oh......what? Lets put all the vehicles in that hallway.....heh ~laughs~ sweet! ...lets do it ~evil grin~

Gamers Domain #2 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

HAHA!....their getting sooo pissed ~smiles~ CRAP!.....my game locked up! hmmm.....mine did too. uhhh....dude? I see it too.......what the...? uhhh....DUDE!

Gamers Domain #3 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

A vortex opens up before them, created by some strange disturbance. Both Eric and Aryeh get sucked in and spun through time and space........and the internet? ... ... This cant be good..... Where the hell are we?..

Gamers Domain #4 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

Why does this place look familiar...? ~looks around~...yeah it does look familiar...almost like that map on Halo we were playin...heh. ... ... uhhh....you mean to say we're IN the game.... Yeah, look over there at the guys in blue...one just threw a grenade that looks exactly like the ones in game.

Gamers Domain #5 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

uhhh...that was like...thrown at us dude. yeah...your right.....uh oh.. TAKE COVER! AHHHH! The explosion from the grenade has thrown the two gamers back into the network. What game will they be thrown into next?

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Gamers Domain #6 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

The portal starts to close and throws them into the next available game being played on the net, a lan party currently playing Neverwinter Nights, a fantasy RPG. Hey!....we're not dead! SWEET! ... ...

Gamers Domain #7 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

Aryeh? Eric? heh....you look like Spock with a skin disease......~laughs~ Ha..Ha..it is to laugh....and for your information I look like a Drow, atleast I'm not playin the part of an anorexic midget! oh.....that was low. no kidding shorty. ~smiles~

Gamers Domain #8 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

not to break up this witty conversation....but look behind you. yeah right.....like im gonna fall for that one....~rolls his eyes~ I may be Drow but I'm not dumb, half pint. ~sighs~........crap. ...

Gamers Domain #9 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

AHHHHHHH!.....RUN!!! BOOOOO! Keep runnin, I think he's gainin!.......~laughs~ BOOOO! HEEEEEEEEEELP!

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Gamers Domain #10 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

~swish.....slice....thwack~.....AHHHHHhhhhh.....! ~gasps for air~....That was close. I saw that you were in need of help, are you ok? ~drool~ My name is Lady Tass Silverhawk and you might be....? I....uh.....me...name....right...

Gamers Domain #11 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

It's good to be small sometimes...~smiles~ Oh, excuse me master dwarf, but I didnt see you standing there. ~smiles~ uhh....my name.....crap...uh...yeah...2 seconds.... dont worry about it, its the story of my life....~sighs~ ~giggles~.....your funny master dwarf.

Gamers Domain #12 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

I wonder if that little shit of a dwarf was lookin up my skirt..... AH....HA!...my name is Aryeh!....YES!.....~does the happy dance~ uhh...thats good...uh...Aryeh...listen, I must be going now, I am meeting someone at the Silver Raven Inn. Oh?...really?...can we go too? ~looks excited~ NO!.....errr.....I mean...no kind sir I must be going alone....heh....ALONE...yeah...thats it....~smiles~ what a hottie!.....she likes me I know it.

Gamers Domain #13 by rascalsviper75 12-02-06

She totaly digs me dude! freaks! dude....she soooo....hates us....heh  !?  anyways, where was Silvereagle heading? Thats Silverhawk, and shes going to the Silver Raven Inn.

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Gamers Domain #14 by rascalsviper75 12-04-06

The two gamers now venture forth, in hopes to find the Silver Raven Inn. Did you hear that? That sounded like a narration.......... The two gamers stop in a clearing wondering what path they should take now. There it is again...... ~looks up~ SHUT UP!

Gamers Domain #15 by rascalsviper75 12-04-06

We're lost......are'nt we? I uh...... ... I know exactly where we are......I recognize that tree...yeah...I know where we are. Ok...ok...ok...I'm lost........uh.....Eric?

Gamers Domain #16 by rascalsviper75 12-04-06

RUUUN! Hey....where are you going?.....did you find a way to the Inn? ... ~sigh~.....mother said there be days like this.

Gamers Domain #17 by rascalsviper75 12-04-06

How did you pass me so quick? Longer legs shrimp.......keep running! Both gamers notice that the unknown attacker has vanished and decide to catch their breath in a clearing. AHHH!...what ...the....DAMIT! Calm down, you'll get used to the narration after awhile. Hey look over there...its a farm....and I think I see the Inn from here too.

Gamers Domain #18 by rascalsviper75 12-04-06

I think your right....I can see the Inn...lets go. You bet...lets see if we can get any help in there. ~looks around~.....nice place. Hey....I think I see Lady Tass! I'll go see if she knows anything that might help us out. heh....sure sure sure....~orders and ale~

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writing out stage directions in dialog is ham-fisted and kind of awkward. can you try another way of making it known what the character is doing without telegraphing?

also : some dialog can be internal. never underestimate the "pregnant pause" effect - not everyone has to have something to say/do in every panel....

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Stage Fright by rascalsviper75 12-07-06

ok..ok...heres another one...your mama's sooo fat......uhh...whats that your holding? Its a gift......for you...take it. haha...now that was funny.

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NUTS! by rascalsviper75 12-07-06

FINE!.....heres my last nut....its a special one.......really spicy! Well...so much for chestnut...haha!

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Just Chewin the Fat by rascalsviper75 12-07-06

Give it to me straight doc....... Well....I hate to say it but......we couldnt save your baby pork-chop. WHY?.........WHY? There was complications....you see one of the nurses brought barbeque sauce.... Theres some left if your hungry.......no?

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i didn't hate the last one.....much.

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A Dead Christmas by rascalsviper75 12-07-06

HO-HO-HO! And what would you like for christmas Timmy? braaaains! Good luck with that!

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