I don't think you have a lot of room to criticize people who make vulgar or low-brow comics.
Anyway, here's my advice.
Your political comics are often too specific. Even people who share your political views may find it off-putting that you basically tell them what to think, as with the "Republicans are so screwed-up" line in this one:
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Outside a Tea Party Rally.....
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| Hey fellow Tea Partier!... You look lost.. | |
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| No... I'm not part of your little group, I'm just passing by. | |
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| Well, that's just because no one has given you your opinion yet! Here, I have... Sarah Palin... Michelle Bachmann... Glen Beck... Paul Ryan... The Fox News Bundle Package.. | |
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| No thanks... I prefere to form my own well informed opinions. | |
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| Here!!!..... Rush Limbaugh!!!... Now this is some old school shit here... | |
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| And people wonder why Republicans are so screwed-up. | |
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I do like the "no one has given you your opinion yet" line. But this comic would be better if you just omitted the last dialogue bubble entirely. Just show the reader some Republicans acting screwed up, and let them draw their own conclusions.
Doonesbury is, IMO, perhaps the only decent political comic: never annoyingly preachy, and always at least a little bit funny. I don't know whether you agree with Trudeau's views, but you could probably learn a lot from his writing style.
(An aside: this isn't the only comic where I've seen you use the "water stream" graphic in a situation where one of the "height" props would probably be better.)
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| Dude quit staring at me like that, you're seriously creeping me out ! | |
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| Really, I mean it ! Red Squirrels are an endangered species !! You'll get in trouble if you eat me ! | |
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| Fines in the thousands of dollars... think about it ! | |
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| Actually , I was thinking of helping you INCREASE the population... I bet that tail tickles. | |
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This one has too obvious a premise and too weak a joke to be any good. Shock humor is rarely effective on StripCreator: we have almost no restrictions on the content of comics, so you're not breaking any taboos, and we've heard this kind of thing many times before.
A couple of other comics that are "too obvious to be funny" are the one about the nun having sex and the one about the Frenchman being cowardly.
Here are my three favorites:
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| This Polynesian sculpture is hypotizing. Darkly inspired by an ancient war-like people. | |
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| It stirs emotions both frightening and sensual... Yet somehow it somehow it seems eerily familiar... What do you think dear? | |
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| Don't seem familiar to me at all. | |
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This is clever; I don't think anyone's noticed the similarity between those two characters before.
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| My parents are getting divorced and I feel like it's all my fault... I wanna die. | |
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| Oh, sweetie, No...These things happen, sometimes parents jus grow apart... It's not your fault. | |
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| You're right, I feel much better... Thank you so much for your help ! | |
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| You're welcome dear... And remember... It would take one of those God-awful GOTH kids to depress their parents enough to cause divorce... Bye-bye Hun... *click* | |
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I wasn't expecting the twist in the last panel. It was funny and quick.
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| Would you like some more tea dear? | |
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| Why yes darling, and another of those wonderful cookies please. | |
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| It's so hard to find good help these days | |
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| Don't I know, on the yacht yesterday, Maria spilled champaign and caviar all over my designer bathing suit! | |
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| I heard Obama was genetically engineered in Iran with genes from Bin Laden, Arrafat and Amin ! | |
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| I heard he trained Muslim fleas to invade Sarah Palin's panties and drive her insane ! | |
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Here you're doing exactly what I wanted you to do with the earlier Tea Party comic: you show Tea Partiers acting crazy instead of telling us that they're crazy. Contrasting them with "normal" tea parties is an effective technique.
I think you have promise. Keep working at it.
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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!
