I would have appreciated a much tighter story. It tends to go off from topid and doesn't really go anywhere. Each comic doesn't advance the story along at all. In fact, It seems like you didn't even plan the story out at all, it seems like you just sat down and started writing. An effective comic series is a grueling operation filled with hours of planning. You need full outlines detailing what will happen and how each comic will advance the next. For examples of this go read some series that I've written.
While I didn;'t find this series to be spectacular, I have faith that you will learn from your mistakes and return with a comic series worthy of sme sort of hall of fame.
GOOD LUCK!