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JBillyB January 29, 2003 10:02 PM	It isn't to good, but i could use some constructive criticism. It is not based on the TV show.
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ArtemisStrong January 29, 2003 10:24 PM	*Artemis rubs eyes and stares, as he is awash in an ocean of disbelief and astounded confusion. Huh? Whah? Uhm... ok.
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Devin January 29, 2003 10:47 PM	See, now I'M scared to read it. Well, actually, I'm just too lazy. Okay, I admit it. I was just looking to post something.
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evil_d January 30, 2003 8:23 AM	quote: Okay, I admit it. I was just looking to post something. I hope you're paying Brad for that bandwidth.
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not_Scyess January 30, 2003 9:58 AM	quote: See, now I'M scared to read it. Well, actually, I'm just too lazy. You're not missing anything. I rather wish I'd been too lazy to read them.
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evil_d
January 30, 2003 10:44 AM

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It isn't to good, but i could use some constructive criticism.

I think 1 and 8 are good. The jokes are solid. However, using the gabe-kovacs character doesn't work, I think. His expression is too deadpan for your purposes.

As for the rest, I don't find many of the jokes funny. They tend to be based on weak premises, and depend on an excessively literal and naive view of heirarchical office relationships, which I think has some potential, but isn't carried off very well here. Maybe it's that the people who have this view seem fairly normal and sensible otherwise. The reader assumes that it's the author whose perceptions are skewed rather than his characters. I guess I'm saying you need to make your characters either more or less outlandish.

Good luck, and welcome to Stripcreator.

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Devin January 30, 2003 12:01 PM	quote: I hope you're paying Brad for that bandwidth. Put it on my tab.
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punkrockskaboy January 30, 2003 3:15 PM	You dont have a tab yet you fucker.
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Devin January 30, 2003 4:11 PM	Oh. Put it on punkrockskaboy's tab then.
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punkrockskaboy January 30, 2003 4:59 PM	ah dammit.
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jes_lawson
January 30, 2003 5:26 PM

The fact that rubber burgers was mentioned and a character was called Gabe who wasn't the Gabe-Penny Arcade character made some of Teh Comix sort of surreal/amusing. Everyone has to start somewhere.

PS - Don't listen to that punkrockskaboy guy, He has a point, but he also tends to point at people with no arms and wave at them. But he seems to be buying the drinks as well tonight, so we'll excuse the cockyness and order a double scotch, thanks fella!

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punkrockskaboy January 30, 2003 5:30 PM	quote: and a character was called Gabe who wasn't the Gabe-Penny Arcade character made some of Teh Comix sort of surreal/amusing He can name a character whatever he wants. For that matter, the Gabe character can be named anything ELSE as well. Just make sure you dont get a mixed drink. Shots or beer only.
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jes_lawson January 31, 2003 12:39 PM	prsb, kind of my point but I was drunk when I wrote that last post so it came out wrong. Pass the scotch please.
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punkrockskaboy January 31, 2003 3:30 PM	passes scotch Consider me the strip creator bartender. Anyone else want a drink? I see what you meant now, by the way.
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