new to the comic game and need feedback. no holes barred please.

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sbk2003

Umm, I'm failing to see where the punchline is in either of your two strips...

I didn't get them either.

And maybe i'm just being stupid but, the second one, howcome there's a Part IV but no I, II or III?

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I am a Strange One/'His world is small.'/ 'I love hunting foxes - Ginger Bastards!'/ 'They weren't aiming at us, Not at my house' - Dead Prez/ The Pravda-Raï Party: Triumphing over Diversity

Frankly... just not funny. Keep trying, tho... I did see the germ of a couple ideas there that might be.

PS. Most of my comics suck ass, but that's by design ;-)

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[i]"For the love of beatings, I plunder until my loins find satisfaction!!" [/i]

I think your comics have everything a comic needs to be great except a joke. (Believe me, there is much more than you need besides the joke, but, unfortunately, you also need the joke.) Your 2nd one seems to be completely without a joke, and the joke in your 1st one (if I'm understanding it correctly) is way too weak.

Do keep trying, though. Add jokes and you'll be a good stripper.

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peddling the funny around since 09/24/2002

Strips were okay. I definitely see you becoming great with practice though. Just work on harder hitting punchlines, because so far your set-ups are great.

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Destroying my reputation one post at a time.