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Nitefly
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The Truth by Nitefly
4-27-05
You know, I dont get it. Why is it that we are so unpopular? It sucks, when was the last time either of us went on a date? Are we really that boring? Does God hate us so?
I've been thinking about it for awhile, and it's taken me time to gather the courage to say it, but I think... I think its you that drags me down in everyone elses eyes.....
However, I only say such a thing because I know, as you are like me, that you will be able to cope with such a harsh, yet undeniably truthful statement.

The Reason to be by Nitefly
4-27-05
A man has reason to be. He has a systematic approach to life. Take Zack, your everyday Joe Bloggs.....
Zack's current reason to be is to make love to the increasingly attractive female at the bar which he resides in.
However, alchohol has been known to blur the systematic approach that man faces, resulting in several goals becoming merged into one...
Hey baby

The Meaning Of Life by Nitefly
4-27-05
After time, Wyle E. Coyote had learnt the meaning of life...
SIgh
... Just fucking give up.

The Phone by Nitefly
4-27-05
I feel degraded. I have commited an act that has brought me to a new low of humanity. That will be the first and last time I phone a sex chat number. At least no one will ever know...
At least I'm not the sort to get addicted to these things. Yet, I could do it again, and again. With no-one knowing my filthy desire to call another number, and have my mind eased by the sounds of...
... Fuck

Geek Comic 1 by Nitefly
4-27-05
Not a ghost....
woOOOOOOOOOOOoooooo!
Or a fire...
Or even the apocalypse would shift Tom from his Tony Hawks Pro Skater 2
I smell your fear.
Just one more go...

[Click to view comic: 'Owned']

I'm running out of ideas already, so any contructive stuff would be appreciated, thanks!

4-27-05 2:30pm (new)
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attitudechicka
is never bored.

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Presenting attitudechicka's thoughts on...

1. "The Truth": Good. There was too much dialogue, though. You lose your audience in the first panel because some of the dialogue is really useless to explaining your point (Case in point "It sucks.")

2. "The Reason to be": I don't normally like narration boxes, but they were surprisingly useful in making this comic humorful. Still not the funniest thing I've seen.

3. "The meaning of life": L-E-A-R-N-E-D. If that was some kind of joke, I missed it. Overall, depressing more than funny.

4. "The Phone": Again, depressing. Nothing special, and not funny.

5. "Geek Comic 1": Okay. Again, nothing special, and we already know that boys are zombies once they're gaming.

6. "Owned": Actually, worth the click. Future reference, you can only put 5 comics in one post. It was pretty good, best of the set. I'd use the height prop for the guy inside on the last panel, though.

Overall judgement: You have potential. Work it out.

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Mediocrity at its most average.

4-27-05 3:17pm (new)
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andydougan
Film critic subordinaire

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"The Truth" is very good, but I'd cut down the dialogue in the third panel. I find it helps the timing if the last panel is succinct.

I'd actually say "Owned" is the worst of the lot. What's the joke, that goatse.cx is unpleasant to look at? Not exactly revelatory.

But in your defence: dictionary.reference.com/search?q=learnt

4-27-05 3:47pm (new)
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BigFrank105
Obsessive Comic Disorder

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I think he's a cross between Niteowl and Kajun Firefly (get it? nyuck nyuck nyuck)

In any case, I think he's good.

4-27-05 4:16pm (new)
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Inflatable_Man
Heart stopper. Hip hopper. Pill popper.

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I thought... *puffs on bubble pipe*... it was better than sex...

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Destroying my reputation one post at a time.

4-27-05 5:51pm (new)
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not_Scyess
not laughing with you

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"Owned" is too old a joke to be funny anymore, and I thought "The Truth" had potential but didn't make it. The rest were fucking hilarious, though... especially "Reason to Be".

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peddling the funny around since 09/24/2002

4-27-05 8:50pm (new)
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attitudechicka
is never bored.

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But in your defence: dictionary.reference.com/search?q=learnt

Oh god no.

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Mediocrity at its most average.

4-28-05 9:26am (new)
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