New here for a few hours. I started a comic series, and I know it sucks. I posted it to my friend and says it sucks.

Friend: I hate to be blatant and assholish, but it sucks.
Me: Figures
Me: But until I learn how to draw better, what can I do
Friend: The art's fine.
Me: And your not being blatant and assholish
Me.: You're a good writer, but... the humor wasn't there, it was cliche and overly.. well, played out.

So if you dare, read my comic below. But am I the worst writer here?

Anyway, my question. The script is still young so there might be a chance to save it. How can I improve my comic so it's not cliche and overly.. well, played out. When I wrote it I admit I had Detroit Rock City stuck in my head. What was in mind was a comic which just went straight out in weirdness. I have a hard tme showing humor though, and the humor which does appear come oout better in different ways. It's also sick which is what I tried to portray here. So is there any chance to save this comic or should I just not even bother?

Thanks alot.

And NO I have not taken acid or researched it. A stupid mistake on my part.

Acid Trip by ckun 1-08-06

Santa Santa, what th' fuck are you doin' here? I was on acid while doing deliveries. Acid? I don't even remember what presents I gave the children. DAAAAAAAAAAAADDY!!!

Acid Trip 2 by ckun 1-08-06

Unwelcome Comment So you don't rem'ber anything? Well I do remember flashing this kid by accident, and... Ho ho ho, little girl. I'll get you some of my daddy's Viagra for you Santa. Ouch. I might of been on acid, but that really hurt.

Acid Trip 3 by ckun 1-08-06

Elf Acid Man, that sounds like some ser'ous shit. Whose th' dealer? You can't say you've tripped until you have tried acid mixed with elf magic. Last year after Christmas, we took more then we should have and we don't exactly remember what happened two weeks later. Let's just say the entire factory had to be rebuilt by hand and I now have a few unwanted bastard elf children. And I won't even start with what we did to the reindeer You wouldn't happ'n to have... I swallowed it all before the cops arrested me.

Acid Trip 4 by ckun 1-08-06

Why But why're takin' acid in th' first place? It's great shit n' all, but you're th' last person I e'pected to be doing somethin' like th's The same reason anyone takes it. What's the damn point of anything anymore? That's true.

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What came first: the comic or the comic writer?

I've seen way worse. I didn't find anything wrong with it, its just not very funny. Also the narration boxes in the first panel were sort of uncalled for.

Acid Trip 1 by crabby 1-08-06

Yo Santa, why you in tha slammer? I killed a young girl last night. Yo, thats some fucked up shit Santa. I was on acid. Still, to kill a young girl you jus made the prison naughty list. It was elf acid.

Acid Trip 2 by crabby 1-08-06

Christmas is over, ain't you supposed to be hiding out at tha Nprth Pole or something? Yeah, well, me and Mrs. Claus saved up some frequent flier miles and flew to Vegas to see a show. That was nice of you to take tha misses out an all, but how'd you end up killin tha young girl if you was with yur wife? Mrs. Claus.....Is very kinky. We both enjoy experimentation in the bedroom. Yo thats fucked up Santa. Its the only way I can stay erect.

Acid Trip 3 by crabby 1-08-06

So this elf acid shit sounds pretty strong. How much you paying for it? Well, you know I really don't like to discuss buisness with the blacks. Excuse me? I mean seriously, what are you in for? Rape, murder, extortion? I robbed an undercover cop to support my drug habit. Right on dawg!

Acid Trip 4 by crabby 1-08-06

I still don't get it though, I mean your Santa. How'd you even get mixed up in drugs in the first place? I ran with a bad crowd in high school. This is the worst acid trip I've ever experienced.

So how can I improve? How can I make it funnier?

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What came first: the comic or the comic writer?

Well, you claim your humor is sick. I did not feel your comics were sick at all. Perhaps you're holding back your inner funny. Also I highly suggest losing that first panel narration for no reason. I don't really think you did a bad job at all. Practice helps you get your ideas across better. Over time you may have a firmer grasp on how to present your stories in 3 panel format. I think you're off to a good start and you should keep at it.

This is definitely more of a Narrative than a comedy. Easy to read through though.

Number 4 was good because the timing was there and the punchline was worded well and not completely expected. The others just kind of chug along at a leisurely place, not bad yet not particularly amusing. Making this a really good one shot would've probably worked out better.

Or a series of one-panels.

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for first comics, these arent bad, just remember not to overuse anything, that makes comics suck

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I ratherly liked it.

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"Leave the past behind and focus on the future, but live in the present"

I thought they were pretty good...

Here's another attempt...

Acid Trip 005- Pro-abortion

I'm guessin' you're not pro-abortion? Have you even yank a dead half-fatass, half-reindeer acid-induced thing out of Prancer?

by ckun, 1-10-06

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What came first: the comic or the comic writer?

Thats awful. Seriously, thats bad.

I realised that after I posted it. You really need to give the non-donators the option at least to delete their comics. Anyway, any chance someone could kill this one? I apologies to anyone who read it...

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What came first: the comic or the comic writer?

No really, here I am asking how to make better comics and then post that crap? What the fuck was I thinking? Maybe at the time I thought it was decent, but at the time there was a rush to get it finished... :(

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What came first: the comic or the comic writer?

No need to rush friend.

I suggest you enjoy making comics at a leisurely pace.

Fuck crabby's "leisurely pace". He's a slacker and full of shit. Really, don't listen to him, he's like the biggest flake on here.

I say shoot to make a thousand comics in a week. The overload on your brain (and sc's bandwith) will surely produce comedy gold.

I'm saying comedy gold, the overload. The overload, comedy gold.

Gold, man, gold.

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Ham-fisted ham fisting.

I love when you talk dirty.

Meatball sub with mushrooms and provolone.

Covered all over my face and chest with the grease.

I want someone to dab it all up with a shammy gripped by their teeth. Then, when they get close to my face, I'll snatch the shammy between my teeth and begin chewing it up, pulling the other's face closer and closer...

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Ham-fisted ham fisting.

Now I'm hungry and horny.

Then again, I was that prior.

Likely I'll be that later too.

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Don't like it? Eat me.

Man, I hate people who come on this site and are all like, "I such but heer r my comiks neway boohoo imma go cut my rists now". If you're not confident with your comics, don't make them or at least don't post them.

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More lust than you can shake a stick at.

Someone's having an emo friday.

Don't worry about posting shit. I used to post shit all the time. I still post shit. If you want to see some of that shit, mill through "General Discussion" until you hit something called "Four Inches of Voldo." No, I won't link it. At the time, you think it's funny. After a couple days we all forget about it anyway. Just keep on truckin'.

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the kid's getting old, the kid's getting old

me im the one that sucks makeing comics

look at my comics thay suck

Its times like this when I think Brad should just close registration down and only allow new users on an invite basis.

Amen.

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the kid's getting old, the kid's getting old