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mtgrnwdstar
Stripcreator Newbie

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I'm not expecting any great marks (mainly because I haven't established the characters enough yet), but I'm just posting these to see what could be done to improve them and for future ideas. Here they are, in order.

[Click to view comic: 'The Henderson Twins: The Problem at Hand']

[Click to view comic: 'The Henderson Twins: Revolutionize!']

[Click to view comic: 'The Henderson Twins: Gameplan']

[Click to view comic: 'The Henderson Twins: Roll Call!']

There they are. Hopefully you can at least get a chuckle out of them.

Here's one more, unrelated to the series:

[Click to view comic: 'The Henderson Twins II']

Feedback appreciated.

 

1-10-07 11:26pm (new)
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AngryAmerican
Here at least 3 times a year

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well, here's my take:

good on the multi comic storyline. cohesive and whatnot.

good message, pendantic pop music makes me want to kill....stuff

bad cuz even though i'm drunkish and stoned, i didn't even crack a smile. i think i grunted at the last one though...

i sense potential, i recommend drugs/alcohol.

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Kill Whitey.

1-11-07 3:21am (new)
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not_Scyess
not laughing with you

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  Making fun of MTV -- sorry, MVT -- is a little like making fun of George Bush:  attacks on an easy target have gone on for so long that they're old and tired now.  Except the MTV jokes have been going on for even longer.  And unlike the president of the United States, if you don't like MTV you can just turn it off and ignore it.  And also unlike the president MTV never does anything new which could justify new jokes.

  That being said, I think the structure of the comis are spot-on.  You have good timing, good use of pauses, explicit punchlines (though they could use more punch), and even easy-to-read spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc.  It's only the subject matter I don't find amusing.

  And now for a personal opinion:  although it's cool to establish characters in a comic, it makes it hard for readers who read one strip at a time to come in in the middle when you have a lot of jokes that rely on background knowledge of the characters.  Not a big deal, but I thought I'd throw it out there.

  In summary:  I don't hate you.  Keep stripping, though, and you'll get it.  Or you won't.  One or the other.

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peddling the funny around since 09/24/2002

1-11-07 6:08am (new)
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attitudechicka
is never bored.

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I liked the last one (of the series). The rest were okay.

 

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Mediocrity at its most average.

1-11-07 7:48am (new)
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mtgrnwdstar
Stripcreator Newbie

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Thanks for the (mostly) positive feedback. This was more of a 'sample' storyline anyway, so I really didn't want to do anything too elaborate yet. Good point on the 'relying on character background' topic...I like to try to tell stories with comics, sometimes at the expense of being funny. So, I should hold off on that until I do more comics.

 

Thanks a lot for the feedback, everyone.

1-11-07 10:36am (new)
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biped
Mr. Wonderful

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Are you really a n00b?  I noticed you used the Non Sequitur Donkey in your third comic.

If so, then you're off to a good start.

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Legend, oh legend, the third wheel legend...always in the way.

1-11-07 10:48am (new)
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mtgrnwdstar
Stripcreator Newbie

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Thanks.

I did, in fact, use the NSD in one comic (which I believe was the last one I did until I came back, due to stuff like school and work and all that junk), which, incidentially, was the introduction of my (hopefully soon-to-be) flagship characters. So, I guess you can say I'm a semi-n00b.

By the way, here's one more. Might be funny, might not, but here it is anyway.

[Click to view comic: 'A gruesome discovery']

1-11-07 10:58am (new)
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biped
Mr. Wonderful

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Legend, oh legend, the third wheel legend...always in the way.

1-11-07 3:26pm (new)
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