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baton12321
March 19, 2009 5:41 AM

Look's a my first comics, comments please :)
 
 
 /comics/baton12321/457600/
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baton12321
March 19, 2009 6:00 AM

/comics/baton12321/457693/

 

 

New! :)

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baton12321
March 19, 2009 7:15 AM

And again... :)

 

/comics/baton12321/457696/

 

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baton12321
March 19, 2009 7:25 AM

/comics/baton12321/457699/

 

 

My Best :D

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baton12321
March 19, 2009 7:53 AM

:)

 

/comics/baton12321/457700/

 

 

I count on the comments!

 

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baton12321
March 19, 2009 8:01 AM

/comics/baton12321/457701/

 

 

Comments!

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evil_d
March 19, 2009 9:14 AM

That last one was the best.

I had difficulty understanding the dialogue in most of these.  If English isn't your native language, consider writing in your native language.

Even when I did understand, I often didn't find them humorous.  Remember, just because something would be funny if it happened in real life doesn't mean that it will be funny in a comic.  Look at other comics (or comedians, movies, whatever) that you find funny, and think about what makes them work.  Pay attention to the elements of a joke -- the set-up and the punchline.  Your last comic is funny because something is happening that isn't what we'd expect.  Try to work with that: use the first two panels to make us expect something, then, in the last panel, deliver a punchline that shatters that expectation.  Here's a great example:

/comics/allenhenderson/5224/ 

Keep working on it.  Good luck.  Welcome to stripcreator. 

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baton12321
March 19, 2009 12:31 PM

Thanks for the words of understanding. I come from Poland and I do not know how to build some opinion. What you say certainly motivate me. :)
 
PS. Great comic :D

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baton12321
March 19, 2009 1:46 PM

Has followed the instructions evil_d came to me and something like this:

 

/comics/baton12321/457714/

 

 

:)  What do you think?

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evil_d
March 19, 2009 1:54 PM

I like that comic quite a lot, actually.  Good job!

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AngryAmerican
March 20, 2009 5:51 PM

I found most of these incomprehensible.

That means I can't understand what the hell is going on.

 

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baton12321
March 21, 2009 8:28 AM

/comics/baton12321/457836/

 

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