I think it almost works - I'm going to guess, though, and assume one of the missing words might have been "replica" - I don't think that's quite clear enough from the dialogue (and sorry if I'm assuming incorrectly). "One or two words on the order form" is too vague - I haven't seen an order form that works like that. I think the gap that you're trying to get the audience to bridge has to be a bit smaller - I unintentionally make strips that probably do the same thing for lots of people that this one did for me. It's a funny idea, though, so I'd like to read more from you.