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TheCheese
July 24, 2003 9:25 AM

Yeah, my comic.

Comic = here.

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Zerosignalone
July 24, 2003 9:45 AM

they suck go eat a tree hippie

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TheCheese
July 24, 2003 9:59 AM

Wow, aren't you nice. I hate to say this, but I hate people like you, who flame, and never give feedback otherwise. Have a nice day, and I hope you choke on one of those cocks you're sucking.

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TheCheese
July 24, 2003 10:00 AM

The least you could do is use proper grammar, oh ye of little brain.

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Zerosignalone
July 24, 2003 10:04 AM

at least u could shutup and stop harrassing me :-\

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mmyers
July 24, 2003 10:06 AM

Each comic gets a little better. Keep it up. Onward and upward.

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Zerosignalone
July 24, 2003 10:09 AM

shut the hell up

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TheCheese
July 24, 2003 10:13 AM

I bet you were a lonely little child, weren't you? Did you have daddy issues?

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mmyers
July 24, 2003 12:17 PM

quote:
shut the hell up

Gross. Don't talk to me. You're getting your suck all over my school clothes.

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Zerosignalone
July 24, 2003 1:11 PM

jee you guys really know how to make a gal feel special :-)

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User #16352
July 24, 2003 2:11 PM

And you don't. That's why you're alone.

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User #24867
July 24, 2003 5:51 PM

yeah, what ar you zerosign-alone-?

why dont yuo go have sex right now. don't froget to write dwon *exactly* waht goes son so we believe you had sex otherwies the internet will never forgive you

ohj man, good one dood, he msut be a lonely virgin! :rollin ;x :x

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Zerosignalone
July 24, 2003 8:22 PM

quote:
yeah, what ar you zerosign-alone-?

why dont yuo go have sex right now. don't froget to write dwon *exactly* waht goes son so we believe you had sex otherwies the internet will never forgive you

ohj man, good one dood, he msut be a lonely virgin! :rollin ;x :x



actually, its ZERO-SIGNAL-ONE, but alone works too!!

and second, I HAVE SEX WTIH MY DAD EVERY NIGHT AND I LOVE IT :-\

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Rabid_Weasle
July 24, 2003 9:38 PM

I hope you're on the pill.

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Boritom
July 24, 2003 10:17 PM

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Yeah, my comic.

Comic = here.



I shall actually comment on the content of the comics, and not make a snotty-ass wisecrack that will just annoy everyone:

I think Your comics are fairly amusing, TheCheese! Not the best, but definitely worth a look.

Okay, lets get back to mindlessly bashing eachother, now! WoooHooo!

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User #16352
July 25, 2003 6:32 PM

I love this guy.

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TheCheese
July 27, 2003 9:21 AM

Which guy do you love, boinky?

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Kaddar
July 30, 2003 5:11 PM

quote:
quote:
Yeah, my comic.

Comic = here.



I shall actually comment on the content of the comics, and not make a snotty-ass wisecrack that will just annoy everyone:

I think Your comics are fairly amusing, TheCheese! Not the best, but definitely worth a look.

Okay, lets get back to mindlessly bashing eachother, now! WoooHooo!



In continuing the mindful comments, I disagree, I think these comics have a series of events, but no punch line. These comics would do better with a punch line, even if that punchline was dirty and horrible.

For example:
you had:
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I did:
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You had:
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I did:
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The other two newer ones I have no idea what's going on anyways.

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TheCheese
July 30, 2003 5:44 PM

I beg your pardon, but my comics do have punch lines, they are just subtle. Just wanted to clear that up.

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Choobychooby
July 30, 2003 6:53 PM

I like your comics, TheCheese, they get better as you continue to make them, I look forward to reading more.

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Kaddar
July 30, 2003 8:18 PM

Also, this is just my opinion, the other stripcreators may disagree, but like, in this comic:

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I think the "..." in the second panel actually distracts from the comic, I think the ol'garfield treatment of having panels where neither character says anything can be great for a delayed joke.

By the way

I'm not saying all comics need an obvious knock knock joke punchline, for example, here is a comic of mine with the last statement being "good point":
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But I'm just trying to help you improve.

But what do I know, someone posted in my comments for my account: "Possibly only has one eye." so maybe I'm not just seeing things straight. Or maybe I'm just as awsome as a pirate. I'm not exactly sure what it means.

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TheCheese
July 31, 2003 9:06 AM

I would have taken those "..." statements out, but unfortunately, StripCreator doesn't let you change current comics, or even delete comics... so I can't... stupid people should make that an option... *shakes fist*

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TheCheese
July 31, 2003 9:07 AM

Pirates = cool, so I'd take that as a compliment if I were you Kaddar. :)

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mmyers
July 31, 2003 9:43 AM

Hey Cheese,
Not to plug for the site or anything, but...
Donators can delete comics. That's why I did it, because some of my comics felt like naked baby pictures, they sucked so bad.

I think Kaddar brings up some good points. A good no text panel has a lot of comic value. You can almost hear the eyelids flicker. Subtly is good and funny at times, but...punchlines and bookends like "yeah" or "?" or "OK" are hit and miss and require a good set up to make them work. When most comics end that way, usually the punch line is the middle panel and the last panel is just something the stripper had left over and just want to fill it with something. Also, comics, as with people, seem to be funnier when the characters are firmly commited to something. Complacent people make for complacent comics. Kaddar's examples of variations on a theme were good versions of this. He raised the stakes of the characters and punched up the jokey part. That's not to say you have to spell everything out, just raise the stakes.

These are by no means die hard rules, but they're things I've noticed about the comics that make me laugh.

Enough serious talk. Tallywacker. Ah, that's better.

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kramer_vs_kramer
July 31, 2003 9:53 AM

I'm not sure Kaddar's versions were any funnier than the originals.

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LynneKatrea
August 18, 2003 10:13 AM

I agree. TheCheese, your stuff is very good. For those of you who have flammed TheCheese, what's your problem? If you don't like them, tough! Don't read them. Different people have different humor. My comics may suck to you and be funny to someone else. Like wise in this situation. Leave the man alone, okay?

TheCheese, keep it up. I can't wait to see your next work of art. ;)

Positive critisism is everyone's friend. Everyone gets along a whole lot better. (I know I misspelled)

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