This is a cool website. I make comics because all my friends read them. I haven't posted any yet, so I guess if there's any constructive criticism, let me know.

What is Travis Garden really thinking? by travisweird 1-06-05

While indulging on Kamel Red Lights, Starbucks drinks, Hagen Daz chocolate ice cream, speeding in the snow and free music, Travis realizes he may be trying to make up for a lack of something... Hey, it's Illeana Douglas! You might remember me from Stir of Echoes and The West Wing. Why don't you put that frappucino down and sit on my lap? What's that you're doing with...oooh! Pleasuring yourself in public is a felony young man! You, mam, are a whore! Stop it Mr. Depp, that tickles!

Travis Garden's Attempt At Anti-Depressant Marketing by travisweird 1-08-05

Now there's a new way to get the old you back! Paxil cures my depression! And it's nice to know that there's a low risk of sexual side effects! Ask your doctor about Paxil today! Warning, you should not take Paxil if you are Asian. OH GOD, THE PAIN! MAKE IT STOP, GOD, MAKE IT STOP! Side effects may include but are not limited to impotence, dry eyes, migraines, nausea, fatigue, and spontaneous combustion. Paxil, yum yum happiness!

Travis Garden Wants Some Weed by travisweird 1-27-05

Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? Weed? That's enough out of you buddy, you're goin' downtown! It appears, Mr. Weed, that your limo driver has been arrested. Oh well. I wonder where we can get some weed in this town?

Kids need Jesus Juice, not candy... Scratch That, Reverse It by travisweird 3-16-05

In light of the Michael Jackon scandal, Tim Burton's Willy Wonka, a story about a pale eccentric millionaire that gives candy to kids, has been severely changed from Roald Dahl's orginal story. In National and World News, another 20 dead in Iraq today, 30 in Detroit. Tim Burton presents... Dangerous Dave And The Adult Novelty Factory Hey ladies, this entire room is made out of lubricants! So feel free to rub against anything you want! Condom trees and a river of KY! It's a skanky whore's dream come true! When we get out of here, we could strike gold marketing your Jesus Juice! And we can hire one of those Welch's Grape Juice kids for the commercials!

The Suicidal Penguin by travisweird 3-17-05

OH CRUEL WORLD. I CAN'T HANG MYSELF BECAUSE I HAVE NO NECK, AND I CAN'T SHOOT MYSELF BECAUSE I HAVE NO TRIGGER FINGER. OH THANK THE LORD, IT'S THE HOMICIDAL KANGAROO! CAN YA' SPARE A BULLET MATE? Sorry, I've only got one bullet and I'm saving it for my husband, The Polygamous Sonuvabitch. You know, penguins aren't bipolar. LOOK WHO'S TALKING DAVE! NATIONAL GEOGRAPHIC IS GOING TO HAVE A FIELD DAY WHEN THEY SEE THAT! EDITOR'S NOTE- TO WONG FOO, THANKS FOR THE HERRING! WHAT HAPPENED TO YOUR FISH STICK, CHILLY WILLY?

[Click to view comic: 'Your Aristocat Deserves Only The Finest In Dried Cuisine.']
[Click to view comic: 'ANGELIQUE FRAME']

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-Travis Garden

Very funny in a strange way. You could go easier on the ol' narration.

"Travis Garden's Attempt At Anti-Depressant Marketing" and "Travis Garden Wants Some Weed" were great. The rest were, as andydougan said, amusing in a strange way. Overall, I'd have to say they jump around too much. Grab some ritalin and you'll be a great stripper.

(Needless to day, I didn't read the last two comics because they required clicking.)

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peddling the funny around since 09/24/2002

Agreed, "Travis Garden's Attempt At Anti-Depressant Marketing" and "Travis Garden Wants Some Weed" made me laugh, but "What is Travis Garden really thinking?" just confused me.

You might want to establish the character in that first panel, and go easy on the narration.

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Thar's a snake in mah boot!

Even though the Asian girls bursting into flame is a tired cliche around here, I kind of liked the anti-depressants strip anyway. It's the "Warning, you should not take Paxil if you are Asian" that does it for me, I think.

"Wants Some Weed" is a good joke.

"ANGELIQUE FRAME" was good for the first two panels. If you were a donor and had access to the two-panel comic feature, you could have just left it at that. The third panel seems like it's just there to fill space.

ANGELIQUE FRAME by travisweird 4-07-05

And now over to the Q6 weather girl... ANGELIQUE FRAME... Hi, I'm... ANGELIQUE FRAME... tonight is going to be hot, and steamy, with good odds that the South parts are especially going to be wet. I reccomend protection. Mmmm, good job Angelique. Tonight's headlines: fingerin' Wendy...'s Chili investigation... widens...oral sex...in the Michael Jackson case, and details about Angie's vagina. I mean the Pope's funeral I've just recieved a note from Channel 4's weather girl, Mary Plain... Angelique, I want my fiancee back you skanky ho. Oh my. I can't say ho on the air in that context, sorry Mary. One woman's story... Look everyone, I'm wearing a blue bra! It's like you can see through me! I could have been a weather girl. But once you take it all off for Local Access there's never any going back.

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

Here come my totally contrasting opinions:

1. I don't fully understand what is happening -- who is Mr. Depp?

2. Spontaneous combustion is a tired cliche, as evil_d said, with that prop. I'd like to see the fire prop used in some kind of fire safety/smokey the bear themed comic. Also, Asiangirl 2 is discussing the low risk of sexual side effects in the first panel, yet you list impotence as the first side effect of the drug. If this were a list of ingredients on a food package, impotence would be the main ingredient -- leading me to believe impotence is the most common side effect. THis causes inconsistence in the comic.

3. Good. Well thought out, Mr. Weed's "I wonder where I can get some weed in this town" took away from the comic, in my opinion. It did not add to it.

4. Second news reporter -- why is she talking? Creates inconsistence in the strip. Had she talked first, it would have been okay, then it would have led into the second panel. How did Priest & Jon end up in prison? I don't get the last panel there.

5. I have no idea what penguin was talking about at the end. I kind of chuckled at "You know penguins aren't bipolar" -- maybe it was just the character stating it.

6. Liked it. But narration called for some kind of food commercial where this was more of a story about a rich republican cat.

7. Good. Liked the ending. There was more talking than I was prepared for and it made me reread certain parts. That lost my interest.

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Mediocrity at its most average.

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Here come my totally contrasting opinions:

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3. Good. Well thought out, Mr. Weed's "I wonder where I can get some weed in this town" took away from the comic, in my opinion. It did not add to it.

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There's plenty of good advice in the previous posts from the masters, travis, use it well.

My two cents:
Narration. Everybody and their mother's talks about the dangers of over exposition , of too much narration. This is one of the most dificult aspects to master in SC. Narration as a kind of "Voice off" like in the second strip works. Narration that re-establishes what we already now, or see in the panels, is useless.

Rule of Thumb nr 197 : Always assume that the reader as the IQ of a blowfish. Dont do things that are too subjective. The first strip simply doesnt work because is too damn disconnected and confusing. The reader cant "see" the logical step between one panel and another.
Part of being a great stripper is perfecting a sense of empathy..."will the reader undestand this, does the strip make sense for anybody else than me" etc...

That being said, your "suicidal penguin" strip cracked me up, although i cant exactly say why...

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There was once a man who said:"nothing is true!". Although later it was found out that he was lying.

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Rule of Thumb nr 197 : Always assume that the reader as the IQ of a blowfish.

Part of being a great stripper is perfecting a sense of empathy..."will the reader undestand this, does the strip make sense for anybody else than me" etc...

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I always assume I have the intelligence of a blowfish.

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What others say about boorite!

I dont know Kaufman, there's a awful lot of blowfishes out there...

I meant it to try to create a strip as "understandable" as possible. The structure must be simple, but the context could be anything , even Gravitons...Just because you saw a great gag in Bewitched episode nr. 512, and you write a strip about it, chances are most people wont get it, especially if there's a need for context and background prior to the strip.
There must be some sort of identification between the reader and the creator. That's the reason why most comic strips relly on pop culture.
Chances are if you're writing a strip (or a book, or a screenplay..) is that you want other people to understand it and share it, even praise it. Writing something cryptic just for the sake of confounding the reader is too close to the faux-art attitude for me.

Anyway, as i said, those are only my two cents.

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There was once a man who said:"nothing is true!". Although later it was found out that he was lying.